Hi,
This was a very good little read. I think we've all read the stories about people who get murdered because they 'unfriend' someone or something on social media. It would be cheap to make and probably a fun little viral. I think you could have used more original, funny ideas for the photos and for the murder weapon to spice it up a bit.
I only gave average for the dialogue and character because there was no dialogue and no character - not a fault in the writing, just the scoring system doesn't exactly suit this kind of piece.
As interested by your use of 'ON SCREEN:...' I've not seen that before. To be honest if felt a bit choppy around that section.
Still, well done. Good little idea.
Cheers
H
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