Thanks very much for taking a look at "The Far Side of the Galaxy", and for your encouraging comments about the start. You're right - it's a lot of fun writing a story for kids! I'm writing this one for my son (also called Daniel) and I hope he gets a kick out of reading it when he's older.
I'm glad you liked what you read and I hope that you'll stick with it and enjoy what comes next. I've just uploaded a new draft of Part One, but there's no changes to the plot - just tightened up the writing here and there and corrected the odd typo. I'm now polishing my first draft of Part Two, and hope to have that posted in the next few weeks.
Thanks again, and best wishes for your own writing.