Last to Die

I really enjoyed your opening two or three paragraphs.  The concept of the leap caught my attention immediately. The reader thinks they are about to witness a bid for suicide, or at least I did. I guess this was your intention. I also liked your description of the street, with the pooling light from the lamppost. By way of constructive criticism, my feeling was that you could have built up the tension more before the collision and shooting. I realise the impact was supposed to be sudden and shocking and that certainly came across - but maybe a sentence or two to alert and engage the reader.Also the opening words of the female 'angel' didn't quite sit right with me - but then it's so hard to judge when you meet a character for such a short time. Had I been able to read on her inital reaction may be spot on as her character develops.

The appearance of the two strangers was intriguing at the scene of the collision and I would have read on had there been more. Great start.