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The Fight

by alffy

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You write very well and I found this amusing.

Your formatting is good and there were no mistakes that took me out of the story.

I think, for me it would have been WONDERFUL, if the reveal that it was a conker contest had been the final moment and you'd spent more time building up the suspense, which you had started to do - that this was going to be a bare knuckle fight or cage fight or similar.

The actual conker fight itself was the least interesting bit.

Only my humble opinion!

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    • alffy

    • 2012-05-06 19:01:04
    • Thanks for the comments. I did initially end this with the conker reveal but was unsure if everyone, especially outside the UK, would know what a conker fight was? I know the fight goes on a bit too long so maybe I should trim it? Thanks for the review.

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