The Slightest Hint Of Moisture
Funny and quirky, I liked this little scenario. Like Lillian, I was expecting all the way through that he just had a weird sense of humour. I laughed out loud at the bit- did she mention marriage/ babies? The ending is perfect. The dialogue is good. Also the technique of using epithet-type descriptions- the girl, with the penchant, with the latte etc. has great potential- but it needs quite a bit more work to get a good rhythm going. Then you could take this further.
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