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Cupid Wears A Balaclava

by allanpayne

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You know it's true love when you're not even bothered you may get your head caved in at any second.

Type: Short

Genre: Romance, Crime, Drama,

Synopsis

A hurried trip to the shop for Josh soon turns into a life threatening situation...which then turns into the discovery of true love and the realisation that 'cupid wears a balaclava'.

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    • Glen Johnson

    • 2012-06-27 19:10:05
    • Intriguing concept, but I need convince myself to suspend more disbelief that sexual drive overpowers basic survival instinct. Get rid of any "present continuous tense" e.g. "is sprinting" and make it present e.g. "sprints". I think the convenience store location needs an additional EXT. slug line to better establish that particular location. Perhaps all of the (V.O.) should be (Sotto). and shorter. The tension and suspense were certainly strong enough to keep me reading, all the way to the end.
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    • paintbrush

    • 2012-04-06 05:18:21
    • Fairly interesting. But, is his name John or Josh? Anyway, I liked the ironic backdrop of a crime happening during a progressing romance.
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    • jekteir

    • 2011-10-31 19:30:04
    • Too purple and on-the-nose. Who, in their head, is going to be talking about a seatbelt 'tightly curled up in its holster'? The initial directions describing the woman are also rather too 'revealing' about the writer's own sensibilities.

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