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Cupid Wears A Balaclava

by allanpayne

Was expecting a Twist..
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I really liked the voice of the main character, I felt I could identify with him and having the wrong thoughts at the wrong time and the way in which you can seemingly fall in love with someone at first sight but also the knowing manner in which he raised the idea that it may just be the situation. And although I was waiting for a twist, I kept expecting her to be in on it or it all to be a dream at the end, I was really glad there wasn't a twist and it ended how it did. Some of the dialogue was a bit of an issue for me, gogglebox being the more egregious example that springs to mind. It doesn't seem like a word that this character would immediately go for especially in such a situation. The writing style was fine, I particularly liked how you moved from the first scene to the next but there were quite a few spelling mistakes which took me out of the story each time I came across one. Sorry to be so picky.

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