GARY THE GIRAFFE GOES GOLFING

This started really well: I laughed at the image of a man being beaten up by the giraffe and the moment were we accidently spits on the child and then explains himself to the mother was a highlight. I thought maybe the reason for the giraffe attacking him could have been a little more imaginative (rather than just the man just tackling the giraffe). After the opening scene, the viewer will be asking themselves 'why is this kicking in the ribs happening?' and the pay off has to be a good one. There were moments where I thought you overdid the voice over and could have trimmed it back a little: For instance, when he delivers the first pun to the single mother and then says 'nice one rob. Not your best but not bad. Not bad.' It might have been wittier if he just thought 'slick...' or 'nice one Rob...' Enjoyed it.