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GARY THE GIRAFFE GOES GOLFING

by allanpayne

Funny but lacks freshness
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I found this scene to be very well written and structured, with many funny parts. However it relied on caricatures (enter the harpy ex-wife...), bad luck and gross-out humour for its laughs. It could be improved with believable characters and events you can truly relate to. As it is now it's a bit like a sit com: easy laughs, quickly forgotten.

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