My Friend Charlie

Certainly the most unusual script I've come across! I kept trying to work out whether you were going for mad off the wall slapstick or there was a deeper purpose to Einstein wigs, comic 6ft sandwiches and (my personal favourite) the squeaky toy hammer. By the end of the script we have an extremely black comic twist, but I think an audience might be frustrated with this pay off. The set up of three characters in a flat who don't get on could be quite good, maybe instead of Candice, Craig and Jack being drug induced hallucinations, could they be figments of Joe’s imagination? Perhaps he could start off as someone who's happy with his fantasies, but over the course of the script his happy little world dissolves around him as reality creeps in. Some of the dialogue is pretty brutal as well, I'd recommend going over it and giving it a re-draft.