I was trying to figure out what this was. Is it a treatment? Is it a pitch? Then I figured that this was probably written for one of the competitions on the site.
The first thing I would do is change the title. It sounds too much like the animated feature Antz, and even though you may have valid reasons for this, it has been my experience that potential investors will think it is an imitiation first, before consideing it for anything else.
Reading Spiderz, it certainly sounds like it could make a very engaging children's story. I think you need to decide what franchise medium you want and focus on that. Animated film or children's novel seem like the most appropriate. I think Children's story, would suit you best from what I have read. You seem to have a lot of ideas bursting for this. Writing a children's novel will allow your imagination to run wild.
Tommy certainly sounds like he would make a very identifiable protagonist. The Judas spider sounds like that would make another interesting charecter.
I hope this helps.
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