A Dream of Six
by asa2012
Great concept
Character
Dialogue
Concept
Writing Style
You've got a really good concept; here are a few suggestions:
- There is a lot of explanation, but perhaps you could say it through dialogue.
- Make the descriptions specific to make the readers feel as if they are really there, and integrate description into the action.
- Keep the writing simple and concise.
To summarise: I'd prefer to see more action and dialogue, but it's a great concept.