I do suggest a few minor changes be made however.
Pg. 1: Relocate (The boys grab their fishing rods and head towards the dock) down to Pg.2, Under Johnny, Then lets go. The fish are waiting.
(Put it here)
Pg. 1: Elimanate:(Then lets go fishing.)
Pg. 8:Change to: ( with a skeleton in the drivers seat.)
Pg.15: Change to (The Chief turns around and heads back to where the three boys are waiting by the boulder.)
Well written Dialog.
I like it.
Best of Luck Ernie
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