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Bad Day Clay

by David D Sharp

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Very weird! I'm not sure i understood what was going on all the way through but at least it was original and well written too. Even though i got a little bit lost, i was enjoying it! Almost like a dream, i guess. There are a few grammatical mistakes though. P3 you've put licked he away her tears. p4 riddled with Ivy, had sprung up and p5 they almost seemed to even other out. I also liked the ialogue - thought it made the characters seem really innocent and likeable.

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    • David D Sharp

    • 2012-01-31 19:59:21
    • Thanks for taking the time to comment and thrilled to hear you enjoyed the story. I'll admit I don't understand everything that's going on here myself, it is a very strange setting. Cheers also for pointing out the typos - will eradicate them from the next iteration!

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