White Line Fever (A Chance Encounter)
Good story - not sure about the ending
I like this story. I like the language the writer uses, although some of the descriptions ("Frankie's eyes open wide as if they've been pushed out from the inside") work better than others ("A giant jumping bean unzips my skin and climbs in").
I like the dialogue - I can really hear a Northern Irish accent as I read it.
One thing I don't like is the line "A fifteen year old terroist-in-waiting, or so they believe." I think it's a bit of a cliche and unnecessary, particularly given that, as far as I'm aware terrorist attacks in Northern Ireland are not committed by muslims but by 'christians'.
My other gripe is the ending. It's certainly unexpected, and I'm a fan of short stories with a twist at the end, but I couldn't see anything in the rest of the story that made me believe that he would take that action. And how will it "be alright" that he's just stabbed two people with lots of friends? Shame as there is a lot to like in this story.
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