White Line Fever (A Chance Encounter)

Good Writing

by Mel

Character

Dialogue

Concept

Writing Style

Wow- some really nice turns of phrase. Loved the hooded cobra line and the voice like flint. Great dialogue, a lot of concrete detail. I think the end needs a little work because it slips into abstraction, but I can honestly say that this story is the best one I have read on this thing so far. I was interested the whole time.

Conversations

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  • Mel

  • 2011-11-15 19:57:58
  • Chris- Thanks, I corrected that. Sorry, I didn't know that you had to click 100 % for it to show the whole thing. I'm new to all of this I'm afraid! :)
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  • chis

  • 2011-11-15 10:12:26
  • Thanks, Mel. I tried to read your latest project but you haven't uploaded anything except the title page?
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  • chis

  • 2011-11-12 08:10:16
  • Thank you, Melissa, your review is much appreciated. I shall return the favour.