hi riddleywalker, i would like to personally thank you for your comments and criicism. You are welcome to personally point out the mistakes to be changed. I will take care to improve next time.
Read my story "Beyond the Borders of Life" too
saved the lakhs of lives inside the temple - shouldn't that be - saved the lakhs lives insinde the temple. There are a bunch more examples I could point to. Would it be helpful if I made a list of the ones that I would personally change? It's entirely up to you.