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  • sureshmiyer

  • 2011-02-22 18:11:18
  • hi riddleywalker, i would like to personally thank you for your comments and criicism. You are welcome to personally point out the mistakes to be changed. I will take care to improve next time. Read my story "Beyond the Borders of Life" too
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  • riddleywalker

  • 2011-02-22 15:40:17
  • sorry! re my comment below, it should be: *saved the lakh's lives inside the temple
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  • riddleywalker

  • 2011-02-22 15:39:27
  • saved the lakhs of lives inside the temple - shouldn't that be - saved the lakhs lives insinde the temple. There are a bunch more examples I could point to. Would it be helpful if I made a list of the ones that I would personally change? It's entirely up to you.
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  • riddleywalker

  • 2011-02-22 15:37:09
  • He looked much elder beyond his age - shouldn't that be - he looked much older, beyond his age - or just - he looked beyond his age
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  • riddleywalker

  • 2011-02-22 15:35:42
  • I thought this was a really good story, but it seems there are some basic grammar and spelling mistakes in it. Is English your second language by any chance?