I could see the house and the street from the opening scene but it may have been a little too over descritpive from there. The make of the phone and the bag etc... use the space on a script to progress ths story.
The interaction was good between them but I couldn't find anything redeeming about Matt or a reason as to why Ellone would want him back. He just seemed grumpy. Perhaps if we saw him thumbing the same picture at the begining we would see another side and the grumpiness perceived as hurt. Using the same photo would see it come full circle also.
Other than that I can see the sentiment and it has great potential.
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