That was very intriguing. You have a knack for realistic dialogue, but I think it might be overly worded, might want to think about cutting back a bit.
It really made me want to keep reading to fi... Read More
I really liked this. Very good description and setting. the dialogue was convincing and there was a lot of tension in the lead up to the last few lines and the reveal. A clever joke. Big technical stu... Read More
Nice gag and reveal. Speaks to the philosophy of the character (would step over his own grandmother to get where he is) and he quite literally does.
There's a question of believability to the lett... Read More
that's one of the best things I've read in a while. Erm not sure how you could improve that really. Other than paying attention to grammar.
I'm a sucker for tragic down endings. And this plays rig... Read More