Reviews written by haleyk8
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Loved it! The concept was great - i really got a feel for Paradise Island. It was kind of predictable but in a good way - i liked being able to guess what might happen. The characters... Read More
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This is right up my street - i love fantasy writing. I think it would be a good start to a full length novel - of course the main characters would have to survive unless some other hunters ... Read More
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i met someone liket his once! Not quite as bad though. I like the character, he's definately memorable! Fits in nicely with the theme of the competition.
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You have a very good writing technique. i felt it read a little more like a diary than a story to begin with but picked up later on. The interview was funny and the other parts of the... Read More
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I thought the story was great - although i was a little disappointed in the ending - probably only because as i was reading it, i figured that she was mentally ill and had multiple personalities ... Read More
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I love a good desert island tale with pirates! Nice accent with the dialogue on Hunter's character. You should try getting it published in a magazine or anthology. Look at Duotrop... Read More
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I was really scared reading this and it's the middle of the day!! Very enticing read - i knew it was going to turn out to be spiders! I loved your characters too, i got a real feel for them w... Read More
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Never really thought about being a chicken before, but now.........! Nice and original - i enjoyed reading it.
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I really enjoyed reading this. I knew something alien was coming! The ending was particulaly good - nice twist. You should enter into the sci-fi comp
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There wasn't too much story to read but i still managed to love the characters in that time. Very dramatic which i like. ... Read More
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I was really taken aback by this - written in a very original tone and done so very smoothly. It was a very good read and i especially liked that you wrote a snippet of the ending at the beginning. ... Read More
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A good insight to dangerous dogs. Nice to see it written in the dogs view too as we see how much the owner is to blame for this. Sad that it actually does happen too. Well written - quite a predict... Read More
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I liked the style and the characters, the setting too was well described. I wanted to know more about why this man was so depressed, why was he watching this happy family almost resentfully? I think... Read More
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Wow - i feel depressed! You write very well and i very quickly liked Jo, which makes the ending all the more sad. ... Read More
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This was really gripping. The way you write had me hooked to the pages. The characters were well rounded and thought out and i especially liked the twist at the end - wasn't expecting that at al... Read More
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A great insight to what the future holds! Lots of originality and quirky ideas. Written well - not sure why it's in italics though. A good strong opening which compells the reader to read on. ... Read More
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I found that it read a bit too much like a diary. Maybe try cutting out some bits that aren't moving the story along. Also i didn't think the main character was very likeable - sorry! That ... Read More
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Very weird! I'm not sure i understood what was going on all the way through but at least it was original and well written too. Even though i got a little bit lost, i was enjoying it! Almost like ... Read More
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I agree. The idea is both relevant and intriguing. Bullying is always a relevant topic unfortunately. It is too short of a preview though as you cant get a fel of the characters or the storyline. N... Read More
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I like the dogs - i always find it difficult to write in first person as i find the story can be lost a little bit in one characters view unless its very well written. Having the main character as a ... Read More
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A funny script. A liked the tree! Reminds me of my parents actually. It captures the relationship between a retired, married couple who disagree on everything (like most of them!) Would appeal to tha... Read More
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It's pretty much perfect! Great start and i was hooked through to the end. You really keep a suspense throughout and learning about what really happened to james was put in just at the right time. i... Read More
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A nice comical story - i especially liked the twist at the end. Very well written amd you set the scene very nicely. Sort of reminded me a bit of a rom com that i've seen before. Quite a simple ide... Read More
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I love the artwork for this peice - did you do it yourself? Obviously a very clever and imaginative person. It's quirky and different. Maybe give a little more time setting the scene before beginnin... Read More
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I agree with the other comments. The story builds itself up at a nice pace and the characters are well rounded. I'm intrugued to know more about London and what happens next. I too live in Wales an... Read More
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Very short story but nicely worded. I like the dialogue and the concept, and the descriptions are very nicely done too. It would make a strong beginning to a book if you ever considered writing one.... Read More
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Nice idea - i like the characters names - especially the way they start with the same letter of the animal. Lots of children's books do that - Peppa pig for one. It makes them easier to remember. i... Read More
