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Dosed

by cstreet

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Intertwined characters search for salvation in the face of crippling drug addictions

Type: Feature

Genre: Crime, Edgy, Drama,

Synopsis

We follow an onsomble of characters as they are forced to confront the harsh reality of their drug riddled lives. Jason, a former police officer, still haunted by the death of his wife and on a path to self destruction is attempting to help his newly aquired friend Christina, get high and get control of her life as she battles to get her child back. His former partner, Lloyd is finding the job of keeping Jason off the radar and juggling his pregnant stripper girlfriend and wife, increasingly demanding. His troubles are added to when a known drug dealer Earl, is taken into custody claiming to be dealing to Jason. Earl, meanwhile has an equal amount of his own problems to deal with as he finds his patch slowly being over run by cheaper dealers offering better merchandise. One of his most loyal customers Jimmy, gets a fix that will change he and his wife Alex's lives dramatically forever.

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    • liam197199

    • 2010-10-10 16:34:02
    • Hey Carly I finally got around to reading this again, sorry for the delay. Firstly I can't remember If it's been changed or not (but I don't remember it during the first read) but I like the new scene at the beginning with the pictures on the walls gave Jason's character a lot of depth. The part with Jill confused me a little bit, i was unsure if she was a stripper or ran the joint. She comes out of a staff room which could mean either one and made me a little unsure. Also about the setting and general location, did you have anywhere in mind, because it might be useful for the readers to know to make it easier to picture. Theres a great scene towards the end with Jason and Christina, really liked it and felt for Christina. Coooool beans :D
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    • cstreet

    • 2010-10-03 14:24:27
    • Ok, a slightly edited version is up now, - thanks for you comments. I just need one more scene now ...... inspiration???? :)
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    • liam197199

    • 2010-10-02 21:04:03
    • Hey didn't want to really Review this yet as it seems to be unfinished. Okay here we go. First of all I thought it was quite interesting, perhaps a little bit too interesting. It felt like there were far too many characters, some were key to the plot other's didn't appear so. Either way along with the amount of characters and the fact they don't have individual introductions (e.g I thought Alex was a boy 0_0) I found it really hard to tell who was who and if I had read their name before ect. The ones that really stood out for me were Lloyd, Jason, Debra and Christina. Mainly because they were the first characters I was introduced too but also because I found their story more interesting than the others. Not sure if you wanted some grammar checks but I made a few that stuck out. When you put Cut Too, It should be Cut To. Thats' about it haha. Okay so I liked the scene where Alex got mugged It was completely unexpected and really surprised me which I like. One last thing I really liked about this script was the interchanging scenes where Jason was hallucination or remembered parts of debra. Also the scene where he thinks he spots her across the street was well written. Good stuff, needs to be finished! : )
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    • cstreet

    • 2010-10-02 18:14:01
    • Morgan g you are a beautiful human :)

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