We Shall See
Interesting idea with room for improvement
The opening of the film offers a clear image of the young protagonist and his dilemma. The overall humorous tone is already detectable in the first few lines. This is a good short screenplay however the theme is nothing new and has been explored a lot in the past. Nevertheless, good writing and I like the twist that instead of a porn movie a children’s movie appears on the screen in front of Jonas. I like the idea that the story the narrator tells in the children’s movie appears to relate to Jonas’s destiny but it does appear slightly farfetched even though he ventures out to ask Celeste to embark with him on the mystery of life...it does not become clear how that relates to his earlier motives...so this could be improved. Well written dialogue and the idea has potential.
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