Dear Arti, I read your story and it is good. The raw emotion comes through very well. In fact it may be a bit too raw for fictional purposes. Some emotional distance would heighten the effect.
The English, though excellent, is a bit stilted and awkward. Also I would change the title, again this may be a translation issue, but having a question mark in the title undermines your message and asking a rhetorical question at that.
This concept has been done before and so, you need unique elements that set your story apart - use your creativity to achieve this.
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