Conversations

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  • James Collins

  • 2013-01-27 16:15:13
  • I kind of got this Jazzy feeling from it, as if this entire story could be written and played out by a jazz tune in a Manhattan neighborhood. I was very confused by the ending though and was wondering what was happening, but I caught on. This was well-written, and looks very professional. The only suggestion I have is that you make a notable space between when they're in the street and then in the hotel so that it doesn't seem as choppy. Good story. :)
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  • dreynard

  • 2011-11-29 20:32:10
  • I was immediately drawn into this story - vivid narrative and characterisation. A contemporary plot which left wanting to know what happened to both protagonists. Excellent.
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  • elliesmith

  • 2011-11-26 16:27:00
  • I'd love more feedback on this story.
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  • suewrite

  • 2011-11-15 14:46:37
  • Ellie, I can only see your cover page. If you go to 'edit your project', you can change the percentage viewable to 100%. That should do the trick.