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Garden of Illusion

by Steven Mace

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Ruth sleeps alone in her apartment. Outside, a menagerie and a setting sun. Meanwhile the assassin waits, and stalks his prey...

Type: short story

Genre: Sci-Fi / fantasy,Revenge,Futuristic

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Ruth is trapped in a virtual reality world, her prescribed therapy for her psychological problems after witnessing the murder of her family by a dangerous assassin. Ruth has been merged with the virtual world of the machine for too long, until her consciousness and the machine are inseperable.

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    • Steven Mace

    • 2012-05-15 12:13:19
    • Thank you for your kind words Judith! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks a lot for your technical/grammatical advice Happy Hound- I do appreciate that, this is one of the first stories I ever wrote, it was written back in 2001-2002. I've self published all of my early stories, and when I read a lot of them again later, there are often things like duplications of words, elongated sentences and also little quirks of description I hadn't noticed at the time. You're right about the clunky sentence of course, and that is where I would benefit from a good editor and a fresh pair of eyes on my work before self-publication. I could have written the first couple of introductory paragraphs with better clarity of description. For example that sentence as you suggested, followed by 'devoid of human life'.

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