I really enjoyed this and thought it was a pretty good concept. The dialogue flowed nicely as well.
My one negative point, although it's not really to do with the writing style, was that the direction of what the characters were doing could have been more explicit. Also there are a few occasions where the main character is interrupted and that's not clear straight away. Still this doesn't take away from the content which is very good.
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