Brightlands World
by Frankie M
This proposal demonstrates a clear sense of dramatic structuring and depicts a world with a good degree of sustainable narrative potential. However it is under-developed as an holistic storyworld project and the author does not demonstrate an informed or clear comprehension of new media platforms or the demands of immersive experiences. I would encourage the author to apply richer consideration to the world outside of a prescribed TV series concept and take a more rigorous approach to detailing the rules and pressures of the societies as well as the individual features.
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