I somewhat enjoyed the first part of the script - I enjoyed Sasha's character and wanted to read on. However, when it turned into the whole 28 days la ... Read More
My constructive criticism here:
your tension builds too suddenly. We go from comedic to serious almost immediately on the discovery of the postman ... Read More
I wasn't sure where this was going until I got to the end. My immediate thought was a gleeful "Excellent!" (I also had a big smile).
I've ... Read More
I would have thought that a Voice Over would have worked better than her actually speaking to herself or anyone out there, not listening. The world e ... Read More
The writing is good. The dialogue seemed great but as you move further along it gets heavier like the action descriptions, and wordiness.
It's ok ... Read More
OK, so here is a tough review for a very good piece. I was very tempted to give 5 stars for writing style, and I might have, as your writing style is ... Read More
I didn't really see this screenplay as a horror. Although the character was I thought you scared atimes it didn't really make me feel tense. I th ... Read More
This is more of a thriller than a horror and a rather often used scenario at that, although the little twist at the end move it forward a notch. The k ... Read More
I love love love horror. I actually remember an episode of the Twilight Zone that was like this. Maybe I like it so much because it reminds me of the ... Read More
So here I am,
And here are some thoughts, I enjoyed the story, it was really well written, but I have heard it before. A long time ago I might add ... Read More
What really makes this work is the twist at the end. I won't spoil it by saying what that is. It had a darkness that reminded me of the ending of The ... Read More
What I like:
The character. She acts and talks like a real goth princess.
The monologue. It's what I'd expect a 'goth girl' to say to herself. ... Read More