*This review contains Spoilers ...
Not being familiar with stage plays format, I'll skip that.
Yes there are a few typos, but nothing that major.
I like the concept and it brought to mind Sartre's Huis Clos ( http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/No_Exit ) - check it out if you get the chance.
What I'm not sure about is that for me, something is missing. I understand it is a comedy but I think that when the conversation gets serious - and you have some serious topics in there, you should still bring out those emotions. I didn't feel the pain and anger when Marcus mentions the rape.
I also feel that each character's take on their own death would have been a bonus. Not just how they died, but what they think about it. For example Rupert is resigned, it was his time; Dave's pissed off; Marcus, well I'm curious considering it was his choice: does he regret? Is he relieved? Confused?
Finally, although I do like the interruption of the doc with the nurse, I thought the "hiding to have sex" thing was a bit cliché. I don't know, if they had come for a sneaky spliff, spraying the room with air freshner then leaving the three dead men sneezing, coughing and giggling or something ... (sorry, I'm just saying what's coming through my mind!)
I like the idea, I like the setting but I need a tad bit more depth to thoroughly enjoy it.
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