My entry for the Sci-Fi Short Story Competition is now complete. Wish me luck.
It is available here: http://www.circalit.com/michaelvank/projects/project_1330810783/
Please take the time to write me a review, as this forms part of the competition criteria, thanks.
Thanks for the read, MIke. And your thoughtful comments. That's given me something to chew over re: the opening sequence. The project had been up a few hours when you read it so I hadn't realized only 7 of the 30 pages were visible. That is fixed now and the entire 30 pages are are viewable. Appreciate the heads up! Cheers, g
Cheers for the review Mike, I'll take a look at Mister Happy's Funhouse soon. You're right, there's more than 30 pages, it's just that I had it on the wrong setting. Fair comment on the dialogue too, I need to work on the more conversational elements of it. Good point about Guy's name, I just started writing it with him as Guy and never got round to to changing it. Hopefully he becomes a bit more developed during the rest of the script and his background is explained more. Likewise with the second and third acts, the whole thing shifts somewhat to different arenas with new characters and the whole idea of time travel and its consequences is explored more thematically. I hope anyway.
Thanks once again,
Thanks for that review. I'll have a proper look at the implications some time next week. I half-thought the humans were a bit weak but also thought I couldn't beef them up. The action sequences? I'll have a look see. Jokes for the sake of it maybe cuttable. Thanks again. I'll reciprocate sometime later.