Hi Jamie, If you get a chance could you please read my entry for the Scifi competition Solar Surfer? I will of course reciprocate if you want me to return the favour.
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thanks writingmum, sorry Bryan stole your slot, in some ways I feel responsible...
I didn't take Bryan's comments as being controversial, it's interesting to see how different people read something one has written.
I agree about the dialogue points bit - although this piece is unusal for me in that there is no dialogue, my characters are usually quite verbose!
Thanks for the review, Bryan. Glad you liked it. It's not perfect that's for sure, but I'm not sure it would benefit from more about Emily. I think there's room to do more with the arrival of the dog and the woman, who is only a voice - she could be more, pique his interest, maybe she sounds like Emily. I feel another story coming on.