Mad As A Bat

So here are some thoughts on your short script. I do prefer sci fi things and this one hit the mark for me. I thought the main character 'the mad scientist' was a little stereotypical, and thought yeah maybe if you really did want it to look and feel that bonkers then it wouldn't matter but I thought you could go past the expected. Regarding the inventions and the one that predicts, I like this. I do however think it might be better if we saw some of his crazy constructing, through different images or times during the week he's working on them. Just a series of shots would suffice and work well. Page 2, is where you mention ‘looks like he hasn’t moved for a week. In film you can’t tell the reader this, we have to see it. I also think that it could be clearer in dialogue or action what the ‘cube’ is saying or doing. I wasn’t sure if it had said ‘crap’ or that was something Phillip was just speaking. And he won the lotto, lol. Nice, but would have liked a tad bit more build up to that. It just didn’t seem as dramatic as it could have been. With a little bit more character development it would be. Maybe the guys kid is sick in hospital or with him in a wheel chair, anything to give that lotto win a little more kick to us readers. Of course just my humble thoughts, it wasn’t bad though got a small chuckle out of me. Happy writing, Dawn