A lovely flowing script with nice reveals and the unexpected. Great observational skills and a nice little wholly contained story. I wouldn't add any critique to this script because I think it works as it is. What I would say is that with an ear for dialogue and character maybe you should think about a pilot sitcom that could be aimed at BBC 3 or better still try it as a forty five minute play for radio four afternoon slot - I think it has enough legs to make it.
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