The Guardians
by jongregory
The dramatic questions as presented have a good sense of action and stakes and are acutely focused on the characters and their circumstances. However the singular focus of the narrative seems much more akin to a feature film plot than an holistically dramatic storyworld. The viability of this project to be sustainable across platforms is doubtful because it lacks a larger set of dramatic forces that could sustain it outside of this singular plot line and the objective of a single character.
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