I found the whole concept intriguing from the beginning. Certainly the main character, Janie, has depth for such a short script. For me, reading a short and being left wanting to know more, is what it's all about. I hope you're going to expand on this story because it dragged me straight in. It was as though I was reading sub-plot for the protagonist in a gritty drama. If I do have anything negative to say, it would simply be, how on earth would a director manage to get a fly to be lazy?!!!! All atmospheric, I get that, but it's not needed. I would love to read more of your work!!!!! Good luck!!!