First off, I really enjoyed the concept. You've really captured an intriguing dynamic of a friend group, connected through texts, and egotistical outlooks. I particularly liked the fact that the break-up was universally known - very clever setting in the busy street with the opportunistic Alex straight off the cuff responding to Pete's woes. Pete as well was brilliantly pathetic, you've got the pace of him being barged about by external influences spot on.
The plot-idea was fairly simple, and this is by no means a bad point, it was realistic and had real resonance.
The weaker aspects of this script I think have been mentioned in other reviews. It does get very complicated, the women get fairly interchangeable, and I have to admit even after reading it three times I still get a bit lost in the middle. In your head you clearly can visualise every shot, but for a reader the middle part does feel very aloof and hectic.
Enjoyed it!
Many thanks - you're not the first to say this and thanks for saying it "constructively.". Do need to work on it and clarify it somehow. Will see what I can do. Appreciate the helpful feedback and glad you liked it for the better part. Have a great weekend.
J. West