Conversations

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  • carlj

  • 2010-05-06 17:30:51
  • It seems fine. There are parts where I was wonderign if the dialogue was gramatically incorrect for a purpose. I wasn't sure. I never liked the "and we..." Cut to parts, just let it cut to.
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  • Keith Appleby

  • 2010-04-28 17:50:10
  • i read part of it, and have visions of faulty towers and manuel the servant
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  • Roy Gonzales

  • 2010-04-25 11:42:06
  • I read it and liked it a lot. Others that read it, will complain about the large blocks of discriptions you use. I didn't have a problem with it. But, it just might be something you may want to look at, if you do another draft. Other than that I thought it was great. Roy.