A Life Time (short)
A neatly written story, no major formatting issues(FADE IN: is on a slugline), I didn't spot any major typos or grammatical problems.
I liked the action lines, they were done very well.
The logline says 'An Immortal man finds another of his kind'. I would have expected this to be central to the overall plot but it just didn't seem to happpen.
A series of well written vignettes told by some good narration, however I failed to see what any of them had to do with anything, and it all became a little tedious and meaningless after a while.
I'm not quite sure how this story was inspired by the film Thrush but it was nicely written piece that may need some work.
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