No problem for the review, it's my pleasure! It's amazing how many times you can read one of your own scripts and miss little things every single time, but I guess it's just because you're so close to it! So always great to get as much feedback as possible as what you've missed someone else will notice and what they've missed someone else will notice etc :) and it can only get better with rewriting (well to some extent - I've learnt that none of my work will ever be perfect, but you've just got to learn what to take on board, what to disregard, and when to stop I guess!)
Ahh I see, the passage makes more sense now then. For me it came across a little bit more sci-fi like, if that makes sense... when I read it I kind of thought there was going to be some sort of time phenomenon going to happen; but, everyone will have different connotations and like I said that might just be me that's not on the same page!!
Haha, yes I thought it could be inspired by true events!! But, that's where the best stories come from - definitely gave it that realism, which was great! Nothing better than reading a script that has a real sense of heart and characterisation to it :)
Yeah, the number thing I guess is the author's call... for me I have honestly had it drilled into my head so often that numbers should be written out in letters if they are below ten that it just sticks out to me... but like I said, I'm pretty fussy haha!
Anyway, I've seen that you've written me a review, so shall have a look at that now, thank you :D xx