Interesting. Admittedly, at this stage, I have only skim read your piece. But if you were to make 100% available, I would read properly - and amend this review if need be.
On first impressions, I thought you drafted up the characters really well. And personally, I love the concept where a bunch of raggle taggle new age hippies are integrally involved. Provides the potential of a myriad of humorous clashes between them and a small-time gang member.
Also loved the idea of piquing people's interest with a series of TV adverts showing one of the creation's characters in a supposedly real forthcoming event. However, involving Jesus in your creation may prove highly problematic! Do you have a particular rationale for doing so?
Thank you for your detailed response. And no, I am not a Christian, and I don't find your project offensive in anyway. I was only interested in your reasons for including references to Jesus. At any rate, I will read the full version properly ASAP - thanks for providing in full.
All the best! Elke
Thanks for taking the time to even skim read the piece.
The guidelines on this competition are a bit scant, so it's difficult to work out exactly what they are looking for.
I guess mentioning Jesus is going to be problematic for some and possibly controversial. The storyworld will most likely be read as anti-Christian by some but its not really intended to be such. It's really about the power of faith and belief, whether that is in an ideal or a person or a religion.
The only rationale I have in including JC is that he forms a part of an overall story arc and it would be churlish to exclude his part just because I'm scared to be criticised by people who believe in Jesus. I think that anything which attempts to take a 'sideways look' at the myhtology of etablished religions is going to come in for controversey (Philip Pullman books etc) but that doesn't deter me from wanting to tell a story.
Can I ask - are you a Christian - with a big or small 'c' - if so do you find this offensive?