Eldritch - Immersive Writing Lab entry

Eldritch Review

by Frankie M

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Hi Martin, I just read your Immersive Writing Lab entry and enjoyed it very much. I liked your use of apocrypha and was interested in how you incorporated the various angels into your idea, giving them new breadth of character and more complex motivations. The one thing that niggled with me was the character of Gabriel. You suggested that by gaining power through the mass extinction of human beings he would be able to challenge Janweh and become heavenly ruler. My one concern is, who would he rule over? Or has he not thought that far ahead? It's not to suggest that he wouldn't be compelled to do this, just that I would like to understand more of his character and motivation. thanks very much, Frankie

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  • Martin Byrne

  • 2011-12-07 16:57:13
  • Hey Frankie, Thanks for taking the time to read my storyworld treatment. Gabriel's eventual goal is to become a new God and have the power to basically create a new earth or wipe out humans altogether. He will only be able to claim the soul energy of all the people his new 'messiah' can convert to his church - so he won't be as powerful as God / Yahweh but he would be able to rule the rest of humanity, kill all the Eldritch and even remake the earth or create a new race of people to serve him. He's deep down a bit of a spoiled brat. He is essentially upset that Yahweh made the angels and then lost interest in them, and then made a much inferior race (humans) and actually gave a part of His divine power to them. Like an older brother being jealous of the new baby in the family - but with a genocidal edge... Thanks for taking the time to read. M