Hi Michael. I enjoyed this story a great deal.
I likedthe logbook entry style, the development. The fact that some are long and some are short. There was a lot of quirky touches like the washing machine style ‘Spin and Cycle’ for ‘Day and Months’.
I got a clear sense of a young man starting his life, forming himself. I liked his informality, adding human qualities amongst the machinery. It was also good to have the story through his eyes.
The idea of visiting an old ruined planet that we cherish so much was very interesting. Although the reader knows current Earth, they are very curious to see what has happened to our planet since then so there is a lot of suspense created and a degree of trepidation. You could perhaps build on this more.
Good eye for details like the names of planets etc.
Great ending. Very entertaining. It made me think a lot about foreign policy of all things.
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