(SCENE 1) Homeless on Christmas eve
I liked this piece.
I smiled when reading it and enjoyed the snappy, intelligent tone. The banter between the two is great, the fact that Winston speaks like a grumpy, middle-class gentleman only adds to the appeal.
Charlie seems to be the straight guy so far, I'm assuming he's going to have an arc, something along the lines of reuniting with his sister with Winston's help (hinderance) so that could be a fun little journey.
There's a bit of exposition at the start but when it's a comedy play, you might get away with it, I'm not too sure.
Rather than dredge up their background events, could we see drama happen on the stage such as an event between the two such as a slip of the tongue causes a massive offence and their relationship takes a new twist. I mean Maggie does show up but does it change any course of events at all? Maybe it does later on...
Will we see Maggie again? I was a little bit lost when she showed up and I found her interaction with Winston a little too kooky...others would probably say different.
All in all, good stuff - look forward to reading more.
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