Man On The Bench
I was left wanting more. What was the incident that killed the man on the bench? How did the man die? Who committed the crime?
The author talks about the “enormity of the situation” in a way detached from the moment.
I sense the feelings but only because I am told the feelings. There is little character description to provide me the feelings.
There are a few typos.
It has the potential to be a commentary on our rushed lives. But it needs some more work.
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