Beauty And The Geek (30 Second Film Script)
Like the others said - this is more than 30 seconds in length. It's the only reason I have marked you down a bit, as it would not be fair to the others who stay within that time frame.
Having said that, I really like the way you took a cliched storyline and worked it. Big 'ups' for that, because something mildly original is a rare, but extremely valuable find.
Your writing style is solid, though there are one or two minor typos (won't penalize for that).
If I was going to moan about anything, it would be your description of the good looking lad. What does a good looking lad look like? I thought that was a bit of a cheat, considering the effort you made for the young lady.
All-in-all a good read and I look forward to more of your work.
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