Beauty And The Geek (30 Second Film Script)

Yeah, as others say this is maybe a little over long (Although I think I may be guilty of this as well in my script) I actually think you could shorten this a little and give it a bit more punch in the process by having the guy just launch into his speech about their future with no warning or explanation and then just give her a single line at the end saying 'Yeah, Okay' or something like that? Just a thought. Otherwise I really like the idea - good twist on a genre convention