Sorry, but I think you need to read up on a few scripts to get the formatting right.
Something like this is important, very important, otherwise your script will just be discarded.
For instance dialogue and action lines appear to be the same.
Also there are many grammatical errors, you need to present your work seriously, so these need to get sorted.
Brush up on a few scripts (a great site is script-o-rama) and then get your ideas and your concept down properly.
Don't want to sound harsh, but these things need to be done, then you can work towards your own ideas.
pandamukano