My entry for the Sci-Fi Short Story Competition is now complete. Wish me luck.
It is available here: http://www.circalit.com/michaelvank/projects/project_1330810783/
Please take the time to write me a review, as this forms part of the competition criteria, thanks.
This might be more personal opinion than anything. Repeated use of "cop c**t" pages 5 and 6 began to grate with me. I note on page 6 you make it a proper noun with capitals. We end up with "cop c**t c**k" twice which is a mouthful (ahem) and feels like it's trying too hard (ahem again) to be funny. Just a feeling when I was reading it that maybe it's a bit too much. Like I say, maybe more personal choice than anything.