This will be the shortest review I've ever written. Two reasons: I don't want to give anything away, and there's not much room for improvement.
You've managed to create a poignant yet funny tale in only a few pages. The best thing was how you got me thinking I was going left, then you took a sharp right turn. Then you surprised me with another turn, and I ended up in a completely unexpected place.
The only thing I docked you for was the dialogue, not because there wasn't much of it, but because I think those two lines could be much stronger. In any story, but especially in a story like this, when there's so little dialogue, it really has to count.
Let me know if you change it. I'll be happy to up the rating.
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