... what you wish for! Lovely twisted wish fulfilment with a sense of humour to boot. To me, the descriptions of Jamie's reactions to the situations he finds himself could have been fuller, especially as they were so unexpected to him.
There's no way he would have been expecting anything to actually happen, let alone the things that did. He seemed a bit too accepting of the fact that he was suddenly thrown into the situations, even though the description if his reaction to those situations was good.
If all he had to do to get out of them was say no, I think there should have been a way in which he could escape the last one too, perhaps with a new-found suspicion of beggars in general. As it was, he did not ask for insanity and so I found the last wish fulfilment a bit off the mark.
Overall, a nice piece with some fun ideas, but I personally think it needs a bit more work on consistency.
Thanks for sharing.
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